【真题再现】

假定你是李华，与留学生朋友Bob约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：

1. 表示歉意；

2. 说明原因；

3. 另约时间。

注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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（2016年全国卷III书面表达）

【写作指导】

一、审题定调

本题要求写一封道歉信，为因故不能赴约向朋友表示歉意。由于高考中对邮件和信的要求完全一致，故本栏目统称其为“信”。人称以第一人称为主，时态需由具体内容决定。

二、谋篇布局

道歉信正文的主要内容包括表达歉意和说明事情原委两部分。具体到本题，只需按照要点顺序写作即可，即表示歉意→说明原因→另约时间。同样，因题目中要点提示较少，考生需合理补充细节，如另约的具体时间、见面地点等。

【参考范文】

Dear Bob,

I’m sorry to say that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon. I have just found that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.

Shall we go on Saturday morning? We can set out early so that we’ll have more time to read and select books. If it’s convenient for you, let’s meet at 8:30 outside the school gate. If not, let me know what time suits you best. I should be available any time after school next week.

Yours,

Li Hua

【范文点评】

作者在首段表示歉意并说明了原因，在第二段另约时间，覆盖了所有内容要点。同时，作者应用了较多的语法结构，如宾语从句that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon、状语从句so that we’ll have more time to read and select books、祈使句let me know等。文章用到的高级词汇有set out, select, convenient, suit, available等。

作者表达歉意时很真诚，如I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble；在“另约时间”部分想得也很周到：既提出了自己方便的时间也考虑到了对方。

【实战演练】

下面是一位同学的习作，请根据点评中指出的问题对它进行修改。

Dear Bob,

I’m so sorry to tell you that I can’t go to the bookstore with you this Saturday. Because I just be told that our class is going to hold a walking activity, in which everyone must take part. I hope that this won’t cause trouble to you.

So how about choose another time? Are you available this Sunday? If it’s all right, let’s meet at the bus stop at 3 o’clock pm. If not, please call me back as soon as possible. Thus, we can discuss the matter in more detail.

I do apologize sincerely to you again. And I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【点评】

该习作完成了试题规定的任务，要点齐全，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。存在的问题有：①小错误太多，如Because I … （除回答Why开头的问句外，以because开头的句子不能单独存在），just be told, how about choose, 3 o’clock pm；②部分语言不连贯，如I hope that this won’t中的this指代不明，call me back出现得有点突兀。

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答案

Dear Bob,

I’m so sorry to tell you that I can’t go to the bookstore with you this Saturday. I was just told that our class is going to hold a walking activity, in which everyone must take part. I hope that this change won’t cause trouble to you.

So how about choosing another time? Are you available this Sunday? If it’s all right, let’s meet at the bus stop at 3 pm. If not, please ring me up as soon as possible. Thus, we can discuss the matter in more detail.

I do apologize sincerely to you again. And I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua